tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2063616960843087433.post4434650471779158381..comments2021-05-22T09:47:33.452-07:00Comments on 1 Story a Week: The Adventuring Party, Part 1: BeginningsAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02835457803350119002noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2063616960843087433.post-52829413740575358372010-02-27T00:57:28.307-08:002010-02-27T00:57:28.307-08:00Chris, have read all the posts. There's some g...Chris, have read all the posts. There's some good stuff here. Only one thing, in this on 'Adventuring Party', take out the 'suddenly' in the first paragraph...kinda ruins the whole opening (show, don't tell - as all the advice says). Other than that, Nice :-)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02934276593230093822noreply@blogger.com